Date: May 09, 2016 4:56 am Title: Chapter 4
Perfect picture.
Author's Response:
thank you
Date: May 09, 2016 4:53 am Title: Chapter 5
Action, Adventure, and Attempted Murder. On a floating ship no less. Frankly there is no way that Brian could not have been there. Think of the rumors that would have started. Sex on the couch with Debbie and Carl in the house! That is just so wrong. I didn't know that Lindsay had panic attacks! Did she really expect Brian to stop whatever he's doing at his party to answer her call? Do I detect a rift in the Ted and Emmett friendship? Surprise, surprise, Ms. Lyons showed up and she wasn't invited. Sadly Everett isn't doing his job. Especially with Ms. Lyons or the hitman that's on board. I would have loved to see Everett and Cynthia dancing. Sigh. Wish it were Emmett. How cool would that have been. Marc unfortunately is looking in the wrong place, the danger is on board and not at sea. Everett was close at hand but not close enough, to stop the imposter from tossing Brian into the drink. Clusterfuck is putting it mildly.
Author's Response:
wow, you are on a roll! Did you see the pic I put in chapter four? I find it hauntingly tragic.
I wish I made movies, then you could be the narrator on my trailers. I love how you break it down.
Saje
Date: May 09, 2016 12:30 am Title: Chapter 4
Party Time! Costume party and we know that Emmett is not going as the Jolly Green Giant. The bad thing is Ms. Lyons will be attending. We meet Marc, exmilitary body guard and learn a special language. Love it. Attempted murder on his watch. Things are steaming up. Lara the driver is a doctor? Brian is very observant. Then we have Nicky, my guess is he's not on Brian's side. Love Daphne, she tries to reason with Justin. At least she's worried about Brian. Justin arguing with himself and losing. At least he has it partly figured out. Enjoyed seeing Ben use a Brian method to stop Mikey's whining. Now if you could figure out how to add the picture of the dress Cynthia will be wearing, that would be wonderful. Everyone at Ben and Mikey's seems to be enjoying the video feed of the party on a ship, except for Jennifer and as we know she noticed something nobody else has. Mikey, of course, is all about the Rage. Justin should be so jealous of the costumes Brian and Emmett are wearing. Since I'm rereading from the beginning I'll continue rather stopping to read the latest chapter, though it might kill me.
Have I said lately how much I love You? I do, I do, I do. Lara fills many roles in Everett's company, so why not a driver and as a Doctor? More to come on that score. I will see if I can find a pic and not a video of the dress, that is a good idea, Thanks. I like when Ben channels Brian, too HOT! I won't complain about you starting from the beginning, and yeah, it might kill you. LOL Saje p.s. i added the photo, per your request.
Author's Response:
Date: May 08, 2016 2:37 pm Title: Chapter 3
We learn Cynthia's and Brian's story and it is not pretty. It does explain Cynthia's devotion to Brian. This is where we learn of Missy for the first time. This was obviously before he met Mikey. Brian should have remembered Justin's PSA. Never take drugs that aren't prescribed from a doctor. lol. We learn a little of his special gift, the one that helped him become the wealthy person he is so fast. We learn that Brian can relate to Emmett which is the basis of their unique friendship. I see Justin as a selfish twat at times, perhaps distance will give him clarity? We have Harry, Brian's attorney and Everett, then there is a fax. Was Brian anticipating what the fax foretold? Next we have Carl and Debbie. Carl is retiring and plans a cruise with Debbie. Those two items seem important, but why? Next we have the man on the bench shame he didn't ping with Marc. Then you leave us with Stockwell, so know we know who will be causing problems.
Author's Response:
I should have you write my chapter summaries since I suck so badly at it that I don't do it. This chapter certainly had a lot going on! Had to keep referring to my outline. I just posted a new chapter
Happy reading!
Saje
Date: May 08, 2016 4:15 am Title: Chapter 2
Ted seems to be full of himself and dissatisfied all at the same time. Ted and Emmett are like two ships that cross in the night. Ted's probably making a mistake by not listening to Blake. Ted's not coming off in a good light right now. Sending him back to Pittsburgh is the right thing to do. Cynthia in charge, must burn Ted's chaps. Brian giving Cynthia his office so she can keep an eye on what matters most to him, does that mean that Justin will be coming back? Lindsay needs to have a conversation with Melanie. You have their voices down pat. Somehow I can't see it coming out good. Mikey, as usual, trying to make excuses for Brian. Brian wanting a child and having to leave for awhile, Justin leaving, having been pushed more or less off of Mt. Kinney. When King Brian commands Emmett comes running, whether he wants to or not. That's a real friend. Brian's made a fortune buying into other business and now he wants to buy into Emmett's. Sounds like a win-win to me. The shocker came when Brian passed out. Emmett's coming in on this on the ground floor. He's going to be an insider. Everett understands what's going on. I'm glad somebody does. Brian's dreams show that he's worse off than anyone would have expected. Even his closest friends. Emmett and Everett seem to be getting along and just maybe Everett will learn what he needs to know from Cynthia. I kinda like dissecting your story, there are so many layers.
Author's Response:
Good to have you back, as always. You are getting better and better at reviewing my work. Picking up on more and more of the subtleties. Makes a difference reading it a second time, doesnt it? You are doing a great job, as per usual, and I look forward to hearing from you again.
I like your dissection of my layers.
SAJE
Date: May 07, 2016 9:21 pm Title: Chapter 1
I'm happy to reread this story knowing what following chapters bring to it. This story makes you feel. You feel what Brian, who has come a long way through his own force of personality, knows he will be losing but cannot find another way around it. Who in spite of being thought an asshole is loved by a little girl who is not his and his son. You feel for Justin, who was so happy with his showing only to fall hard from the review. Justin who is so full of pain that he does his best to hurt the one person who will back him in everything. Cynthia who will have Brian's back. Everett who will figure prominently and be a foil for Cynthia. Emmett who feels badly for Justin, but knows nothing he does will help. He's also become to admire Brian and understand him more. Ted who somehow comes out the bearer of bad news and in trying to be helpful only manages to make things worse. Ben who did an admirable job when faced with an unreasonable task. My favorite line was his was "Any one that has actually read the book would realize that I did not as you say, glamorize self-infection." Telling the bitch off. You make us hate Ms Lyons with a passion. Then there is Lindsay at her manipulative best, demanding to speak with Brian. It's obvious she has knowledge about Brian that we are not yet privy to. She seems to think that Justin leaving Brian will spell the end. Selfish of her since we know that Justin is Brian's addiction. Each and every chapter will give us so much.
Author's Response:
WoW!
Beautiful and comprehensive as ever. I always look forward to your reviews. Thank you so much for your compliments and your time.
I am honored to have you here on our new website. We hope to make this fun and enjoyable for everyone. (or your guilty secret) if you prefer.
Can't wait to hear from you again.
Saje
Date: May 03, 2016 8:31 pm Title: Chapter 1
Just can't wait to start reading this! TAG
Author's Response:
Thanks TAG- Take your time, it is a long one.
Saje