Reviewer: BritinManor Signed [Report This]
Date: Jan 22, 2025 12:47 pm Title: Chapter 1

Yep... always a good day when Mr. Kinney lets a few of his thoughts said outloud. He needs to have Justin know he is different than all the rest.

A quick note... Are you aware direct soeech sentences don't use a comma for sentences said with (He laughed) (He smiled) (He flashed) (He chuckled) etc... etc... as long as it's not a 'spoke' word, no comma, and capital He.

Not much, but just a little tweeking on the proper way for direct speech. It could be different areas where we live.

I am so enjoying your stories.

Hugs ~Cathy

Author's Response: Absolutely, Justin deserves to know... even though Brian has to be drunk to say it, but it still counts! :D Thank you for pointing that out, I'd be lying if I said I was aware of it, but when I read stories I sometimes come across authors writing it that way too and using a comma, so I guess I didn't think much about it and thought it could be written that way too... but thanks again! That helps me!